Tuesday, September 24, 2013

Example of Introduction: What I'm Writing

So, I'm going to go along and do this project as well.  I chose the "Life-Changing Trip" narrative....and wrote the introduction.  Notice how I chose to do two paragraphs instead of one, but still made sure I had all three parts of the introduction: hook, background, and hint of "lesson."  Be kind...this is just a working draft.  Feel free to give me advice.



Intro: Anger Issues

“Our family has a lot of baggage and a lot of anger issues,” said Dave.  I looked out from the bow of the boat, watching the wonderful Bermuda island sink into the background, getting swallowed up by the light green ocean.  I didn’t know how to respond to Dave’s statement, so I just listened, as he continued, “The problem is, nobody knows how to talk about it.”  I felt my cheeks flush.  I couldn’t tell if the moisture on my palms was from nervousness, or just the sea mist that was being kicked up from the cruise liner’s propellers, as it took us back home.  I knew I was in for a long story.

Uncle Dave had a history of telling long, boring stories.  I tended to tune him out, or avoid him, so I didn’t get caught.  I managed to do just that during this vacation to Bermuda, a present that my grandmother gave to my sister and I for graduating college.  There was a catch to this present: Gram wanted to go with us, and bring my oldest uncle Dave, or half-uncle, to be precise.  It was a fun cruise and stay on the island for a week, with Sarah and I skipping out on the two “old folks” to have fun.  But now the trip was coming to a close, and the cruise ship was taking us back to New York, arriving in about 12 hours.  Most of the people on the boat were tired and resting below decks, and I thought I’d get some time alone, watching the island recede in the background.  However, I heard boring old Dave decided waddle up beside me, and I couldn’t think of a good excuse to leave.  What I didn’t know was that this was not just another boring story of Uncle Dave’s, but a really personal one that would change how I looked at him and my family.